Chapter: Pinning Her Down at First Sight?
This chapter was a perfect chance to bring out the emotional playfulness and physical tension between Su Min and Xie Yingying. The original already had some intensity, especially from Xie Yingying, but it leaned toward abrupt, almost comedic pacing with quick tone shifts and limited interior thought. I wanted to keep the energy of the original but layer in more emotion and physical detail.
In the original:
[But just when Su Min landed in front of her house in Xianmen, Xie Yingying rushed in from inside. Then the latter seemed to be stimulated by something, and almost instantly rushed in front of her and threw her to the ground.
Then she threw herself into her arms, breathing something greedily.
This scene made Su Min dumbfounded. What had Xie Yingying done wrong?
"Hey, wake up."
Su Min calmly pulled Xie Yingying away from her arms, and snapped her fingers, causing a stream of clear water to fall from the sky, cooling Xie Yingying to the bone and finally bringing her back to her senses.
After all, she is a cultivator in the fusion stage, and she has strong control over her desires.
After seeing Su Min, her face turned slightly red.
"What's wrong with you? Why do you have a crazy attraction to me? Slurp, so that's why your solar energy has become even stronger."
She straightened her clothes a little, and it took less than a second to dry them again. Only then did Xie Yingying reluctantly move her thighs to move her body away from Su Min.]
Xie Yingying's sudden lunge and Su Min's reaction feel vaguely humorous, but the implications, especially the "sticky" comment, are left vague and unexplored.
I rewrote this sequence to heighten both the sensual charge and the characters' inner responses:
["Hey, hey, snap out of it."
Calmly prying Xie Yingying off, Su Min snapped her fingers, summoning a clear stream of water that drenched her face, finally bringing her back to her senses. After all, as a Unity-stage cultivator, Xie Yingying had strong control over her desires. Not like when they were in the Golden Core Avenue, where Xie Yingying needed decades to manage her urges. Su Min could only assume her return had shaken something loose.
"What's wrong with you? Why do I feel this insane attraction to you? Sniff... Ah, I see. Your Taiyang energy has grown stronger."
Blushing faintly, Xie Yingying adjusted her robes, drying them in less than a second. Her tone came out slightly strained, even as she tried to play it off. Xie Yingying reluctantly shifted her legs, moving her body away from Su Min.]
In this version, the mood shifts toward flirtation and emotional charge instead of comedy. Su Min isn't just confused. She's amused, intrigued, and becoming aware of how strongly she affects Xie Yingying.
The original:
["I met a Sun Body in the Mahayana stage, and he gave me all of his remaining essence."
At this time, no matter how stupid Su Min was, she knew what was happening, so there was no obvious change in her expression.
The solar energy in her body had a terrifying attraction to Xie Yingying, who had a yin body. Of course, the other party was not a beast that could not control itself. It was just that after seeing her, she probably obeyed the desires of her body.
When Xie Yingying activated the solar energy in her body in the Yin-Yang Land, she had shown this behavior.]
I rewrote it as:
["I encountered a Mahayana-stage Solar Sovereign Body practitioner. He gave me all his remaining essence."
"...I see."
Xie Yingying shifted slightly, her gaze dropping to the floor, then off to the side, anywhere but at Su Min. Her usual composure faltered, and the tips of her ears, always the first to betray her, flushed a telltale pink.
Even if Su Min were the dullest person alive, she'd understand the situation by now, so her expression remained unchanged. The Taiyang energy within her quietly stirred, exuding heat like sunlight behind silk. It pulled at Xie Yingying's Lunar Sovereign Body with terrifying precision, awakening a resonance that defied logic, restraint, and will.
But Xie Yingying wasn't some beast swayed by lust alone. Her cultivation path demanded discipline. Even now, her breathing remained steady, her qi restrained beneath layers of spiritual control. For years, she had kept herself untouched, untempted, unmoved. Even when surrounded by those who desired her, she remained untouchable, aloof, like moonlight on snow.
But all of that discipline seemed to falter whenever Su Min was near.
It wasn't the Taiyang resonance alone. No, the attraction hadn't begun with a surge of spiritual energy. It had begun with a voice, calm, clever, stubbornly alive even when the world burned around her. With eyes that never judged her, even when the entire cultivation world saw her only as a prize.
Back in the Yin-Yang Secret Realm, when Su Min's Solar Sovereign Physique first awakened, the reaction had been instantaneous. Resonance had struck like lightning, beautiful, overwhelming, terrifying. At the time, Xie Yingying told herself it was just the inheritance, just the compatibility of their physiques, a rare convergence of yin and yang, nothing more. But she had known even then that it wasn't that simple. Her body had reached for Su Min before her mind could speak. And so this time.]
This rewrite emphasizes more than attraction. It highlights denial, restraint, and longing, and the internal conflict between body and mind, especially when their Yin-Yang resonance stirs feelings beyond conscious control.
["Yeah, a little sticky."
But when Su Min patted her clothes, she felt a strange sticky feeling.
But just as this feeling came out, she felt a chill on her hands. Then there was nothing left. She looked up and saw Xie Yingying with her back to her.]
I made the "sticky sensation" more vivid and meaningful instead of leaving it vague:
["Hmm, a little sticky..."
Su Min's brows drew together slightly as her fingers brushed the front of her robe. Just below the fold of her waist sash, the fabric clung faintly to her skin, still warm with lingering heat. A tacky trace remained, fleeting but unmistakable. Her touch lingered only a moment before a sudden cold breeze swept over her hand, cooling the spot like nature itself had come to erase the evidence.
She lifted her gaze.
Xie Yingying stood a short distance away, her back straight and rigid, as if carved from jade. Her arms hung stiff at her sides, fists clenched just a little too tightly, a little too composed, like someone trying very hard not to look guilty. The nape of her neck, barely visible above her collar, had gone pink. The air around her shimmered faintly with restrained qi, like the surface of a still pond trying not to ripple.
In that quiet, suspended moment, Su Min understood.
Her gaze drifted to the crumpled lines of Xie Yingying's robe—creased where a knee had pressed, rumpled where fingers had gripped, and now a faint trace, just beneath the navel, barely visible but very much there.]
I made this choice deliberately. Instead of shying away from the sensuality, I leaned into it in a subtle, tasteful way because it reflects where their relationship has reached. They've already crossed into emotional and physical intimacy, and showing that makes the story richer. The touch is no longer accidental. It's a catalyst.
I also gave more space to Su Min's perception. In the original, she comes across almost neutral, lightly teasing Xie Yingying but without much inner thought:
["If my solar energy is truly perfect, I will most likely become a true solar body. Who knows, I might have some strange reactions with you then, hehe."
"Woo"
At this moment, Xie Yingying's body couldn't help but tremble, which made Su Min's eyes light up and she suddenly felt it was quite interesting.
So at this time, he quietly walked over from behind and hugged Xie Yingying around the waist, then put his face on the latter's neck and activated the solar energy again and said: "Your face is red, do you have a fever? It's very rare for a cultivator in the fusion stage to have a fever."
This time, before Su Min finished her words, she found that her arms were empty. Xie Yingying had already gone somewhere, after all, the two were just playing around. Su Min couldn't really be ruthless, so naturally she lost control at this time.
"Tsk tsk tsk"
He looked at the empty courtyard and smelled the lingering fragrance on his hands, and a burst of joyful laughter rang out in the yard.
"Hahaha"]
I rewrote it so Su Min has more control and awareness. She notices everything, but instead of confronting it directly, she lets her actions speak. Her teasing walks a fine line between tenderness and provocation.
Her dialogue becomes slower, more suggestive:
["If my Taiyang energy does reach full perfection, I might truly awaken as a Solar Sovereign Body. Imagine the kind of reaction that would trigger between us. Heh... wouldn't that be exciting?"
A small sound escaped Xie Yingying, somewhere between a hiccup and a squeak. Her whole body jolted.
Su Min's grin deepened, catching the sound with sharp amusement. Her gaze lingered, heavy with mischief. "Oh? What was that? I didn't know you were so sensitive."
With effortless grace, Su Min rose, her movements fluid as she circled behind her. The air between them shifted, playful teasing giving way to something heavier, hotter. Step by step, she closed the distance, until her arms slid around a slender waist, pulling her back against the solid warmth of her body.
"Your face is burning," she murmured, lips grazing the shell of a flushed ear. "A Unity-stage cultivator catching a fever? Tsk. How… unexpected." Her voice dipped lower, rougher, the words slow against sensitive skin.
Xie Yingying remained rigid, refusing to turn, but the hitch in her breath betrayed her. The rapid flutter of her pulse beneath pale skin, the way her ribs trembled with each uneven inhale—]
I continued this teasing until Xie Yingying breaks free:
[And just like that, the spell shattered.
In a flicker of movement, she pulled free, vanishing from Su Min's arms like a gust of wind. But the heat remained, lingering on her skin like a phantom touch, her scent still caught in Su Min's lungs.
"Tch." Su Min smirked, lifting her fingers to inhale the fading sweetness. "So slippery."
"Hahaha..."
The sound echoed through the quiet courtyard, light but tinged with something softer underneath. After a while, her laughter faded, and she rested her elbows on the table, cupping her face with both hands.]
Then comes a moment of introspection:
["The desire that has been suppressed for a thousand years has completely awakened at this time, but it feels pretty good."]
In the original, the line hints at Su Min's emotions, but it's vague. "Desire" can be read as romantic or sensual, but I felt it didn't capture the full range of her reflection.
So I rewrote it as:
["A thousand years of restraint," she murmured, her voice quiet, thoughtful. "Or perhaps even more. Have I really been holding back for that long?"]
This shifts the tone from instant gratification to quiet reflection. For Su Min, it isn't just attraction to Xie Yingying. It's about the emotional ice slowly melting. She's lived through dynasties, wars, and betrayals. Her restraint isn't only about desire but also grief, fatigue, detachment, and fear of loss. This scene makes that subtext clearer, showing why she keeps others at a distance.
That's why I added:
[Perhaps that was the real reason she'd drawn a line between herself and others. Not fear, but certainty. That everyone she grew to care for would one day vanish and she would still be here.]
It's not dramatic. It's just truth. And that truth makes her loneliness feel real and understandable.
Then comes the follow-up scene, where Su Min notices Xie Yingying is gone.
In the original, it was very simple:
["It seems that the attack was a bit harsh. Xie Yingying may be too embarrassed to come out for the time being. Let's go check on my two dear disciples. I don't know how they are doing."
Su Min used her soul power to scan the area, and was surprised to find that she could not find Xie Yingying at all. She had no choice but to leave and go to the sect of the Immortal Sect. But what she didn't know was that Xie Yingying was in the deepest part of Xuantian Palace, using the thousand-year-old ice to help her cool down.]
I chose to expand this. I wanted to show not just where Xie Yingying went, but why she went there, and what she was really dealing with.
My version reads:
["Ah... perhaps I went a little too far."
Su Min stretched lazily, a faint smile tugging at her lips. "Knowing her, she won't show her face for a while now." She extended her spiritual sense outward, brushing over every corner of the sect grounds, only to frown slightly in surprise. No trace of Xie Yingying. Not even a flicker.
"Hm... completely gone?"
Su Min sighed with exaggerated resignation and shook her head, though a small glint of amusement remained in her eyes. Unbeknownst to her, Xie Yingying was already nestled deep within the cold heart of the Xuantian Mansion, seated atop a slab of millennia-old ice, doing her best to suppress the fire Su Min had lit.
It was a battle of willpower she hadn't expected. Xie Yingying's breath came in shallow bursts as she gripped the icy surface beneath her, her mind tangled with conflicting desires. The flame Su Min had ignited inside her was impossible to ignore. The Taiyang energy had grown so strong, almost overwhelming, and every lingering touch, every teasing remark from Su Min had brought her dangerously close to losing control.]
This wasn't just about physically cooling herself down. It was about emotional restraint, internal struggle, and vulnerability. Xie Yingying prides herself on control, but Su Min breaks that control with a few teasing words and gentle touches. Her Solar Sovereign Physique resonates deeply with Xie Yingying's Lunar Sovereign Body, so even casual contact leaves her disoriented, shaky, and craving more.
Yet Xie Yingying doesn't want to fall into that again, not because she doesn't want Su Min, but because she doesn't want to lose herself. She wants to love with clarity, not on impulse. Her line:
["You can't let this happen again," Xie Yingying told herself. She wouldn't, couldn't, allow herself to be so weak.]
echoes a past mistake. She's been overwhelmed before, consumed by Su Min's presence and unable to find her center. That kind of loss of self, even when it comes from genuine connection, is terrifying for someone like her.
This expansion wasn't in the original, but I felt it was necessary to show how intense their bond is. Without it, the shift in their dynamic could feel abrupt. By letting us inside her head and showing how hard she's working to stay composed, I wanted the reader to feel the strain beneath her calm exterior.
It also sets up future emotional payoff. Every time Su Min even smiles at her after this, the reader will understand what it costs Xie Yingying to keep her cool.
Chapter: Goodbye (NSFW) – Woven from "Time to Depart" & "Reunion with Yao Xian'er"
This part was originally split across two chapters, but I decided to weave them together into one seamless story. It just felt more natural that way. The emotional buildup and resolution between Su Min and Xie Yingying flow better when the narrative isn't interrupted by structural breaks.
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The first big change I made was expanding Su Min's monologue at the start. Originally, her line was:
["It's time to say our final goodbyes. Let's go find Xie Yingying first."]
I expanded it to:
["Time for my final round of goodbyes," Su Min murmured, brushing imaginary dust from her sleeves. "Let's start with my favorite one."]
This isn't just for style. I wanted to show that for Su Min, this moment isn't just about duty or logistics. It's personal. It matters. She teases, sure, but the softness in that line, the way she brushes her sleeve like she's preparing for something heavy, hints that visiting Xie Yingying carries real emotional weight, even if she won't say it outright.
The second adjustment was how I handled the lore around their physiques. In the original, the cultivation mechanics were almost clinical: Solar and Lunar Sovereign Bodies can't coexist peacefully, they react strongly, and the attraction is primal.
I kept that foundation, but I tied it to the emotional subtext:
[But if two such individuals ever met, they'd feel an irresistible pull toward each other—a primal urge rooted deep in their souls, not just physical desire.]
By framing it as a connection of the soul, not just the body, their bond becomes more than instinct. Su Min and Xie Yingying aren't drawn together simply because of their physiques. There's a deeper resonance that both affirms and complicates their relationship. That distinction matters because later, when they finally cross the physical line, it doesn't feel like a loss of control—it feels like a natural culmination.
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The biggest expansion, of course, was the entire lead-up to the intimate dual cultivation scene.
Take a moment to look at this line:
[If both were below the Dao Comprehension stage, there'd be no stopping what came next. But even at the Unity stage, the influence remained.]
That sentence actually says a lot. It shows just how strong the Yin-Yang resonance is between cultivators with the Lunar or Solar Sovereign Physique. Even at the Unity stage, which is already the seventh major stage in cultivation, the pull is still powerful.
Now rewind a bit. The first time Su Min and Xie Yingying engaged in intimate dual cultivation was back during the Golden Core stage (Extra 4 Part 2: Burning Through the Moonlight [NSFW]). Back then, Su Min could only sustain her Solar Sovereign Physique for about three minutes. But she did activate it, and for Xie Yingying, that meant everything.
Golden Core is just the third stage. Dao Comprehension is the sixth. So when you think about how intensely the resonance affected Xie Yingying back then, it really puts things into perspective. She couldn't resist it at all. She was completely swept away by the pull, overwhelmed by the intensity of the connection. What followed was decades of inner struggle, a slow and painful process of learning to master that chaos. The fact that she eventually gained control over something that powerful is incredibly impressive. It shows her discipline, her growth, and her identity as a cultivator who holds herself to the highest standard.
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Now that we're talking about Extra 4 Part 2, I want to give a little behind-the-scenes insight. The first act of that chapter moves fast, chaotic, and urgent. Why? Because it was their first time. More importantly, it was Xie Yingying's first time. At that moment, she was the only one being swept up by the resonance. Su Min didn't feel it as strongly since her Solar Sovereign Physique was temporary. Xie Yingying, on the other hand, is the true Lunar Sovereign Body, so the effect hit her like a tidal wave.
That imbalance carries through their dynamic.
By the second act, I made the shift more deliberate. Xie Yingying is no longer being dragged along blindly. She's testing, trying to regain control, and even though she eventually surrenders again, you can already see her desire to stay grounded.
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Fast forward to this chapter.
Originally, it read:
[Normally, Xie Yingying was the picture of grace and aloofness, thanks to her Lunar Sovereign Body and cultivation techniques. But like this? The contrast was hilarious.
It was like those pure-hearted succubi or fallen elves in modern games, a delightful contradiction]
It's a cute contrast, but I felt it didn't carry much weight. So I wrote:
[She looked like a noble phoenix caught in the middle of a very undignified molt, stunning, composed, and completely horrified.]
That small change gives Xie Yingying dignity and vulnerability at the same time. She's not just a blushing beauty. She's someone trying hard to keep her composure in front of the one person who knows exactly how to dismantle it. Throughout the teasing, I focused on her resistance, not just to Su Min, but to her own emotions, her body, and the craving that comes from being with someone who literally completes her.
Lines like:
["You know what this does," she hissed, burying her face in her palms. "This isn't funny anymore."]
capture that inner tension. She's not weak. She's overwhelmed, and there's a difference.
On Su Min's side, I wanted her to be deliberate, not just flirty. The Taiyang energy isn't affecting Xie Yingying by accident. Su Min knows exactly what she's doing.
[Back then, she could only sustain that aura for a few minutes. Now, she could maintain it for an entire day without collapse, no more frantic countdowns, no desperate rationing of breath and strength.]
This makes the shift in their dynamic clear. Earlier, Su Min could only hold her state for a few minutes. Now, she's fully stepping into her power, and that power affects more than her cultivation. Her presence alone can unravel Xie Yingying's careful restraint.
Even so, there's tenderness under the teasing. That's important to preserve, even as the scene edges toward NSFW. The way Su Min boxes her in, smiles, or murmurs, "Missed me?" is playful, but it's also intimate.
Because of the earlier line I quoted, I structured the scene so Su Min teases Xie Yingying and Xie Yingying resists in a drawn-out way. I wanted to show Xie Yingying's control, which also happened in the previous chapter when Su Min teased her.
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The first major shift I made was in perspective and control. Originally, Su Min dominates, teasing and pushing Xie Yingying until she cracks. That dynamic stays in the first half, but at the climax I reversed it, not for shock, but to reflect a deeper truth in their relationship.
I wrote:
[Su Min hadn't even pulled back before Xie Yingying moved.
A sudden, desperate shift, swift as moonlight skimming water's edge.]
With this, the power balance shifts. Xie Yingying, who's always held back due to fear, restraint, or reverence, finally moves first. She acts with clarity and command. This isn't just about lust. It's about permission. About accepting that what she wants isn't dangerous or wrong.
I also referenced a long-standing joke between them:
[The beast had awakened. But this time, it didn't need to chase blindly. It knew exactly what it wanted and how to take it.]
In earlier chapters, Su Min teased Xie Yingying by calling her a beast after their first experience. Here, the label is reclaimed as a symbol of agency, not shame. Beast now means confidence, hunger, and trust, a knowing kind of dominance that comes only from deep emotional connection.
The last part, "didn't need to chase blindly" and "knew exactly what it wanted," shows her growth. She's no longer overwhelmed. She's in control.
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Throughout this chapter, I left little hints to show Xie Yingying's self-discipline and how she takes the lead in their dynamic. She's the dominant one here, the one who guides, who holds back, until she decides to act. Su Min, on the other hand, is the one who surrenders, the one who gets swept away. I wrote her narrative to reflect that:
[It was surrender.
Su Min nearly sobbed. Her eyes fluttered shut, and her voice cracked. "I missed this," she whispered. "I missed you. I want you. I need you, Yingying. Don't stop. Please, don't stop…"]
[She yielded completely. And Xie Yingying guided her through it.]
This contrast isn't just for effect. It shows how much control Xie Yingying really has. Even when she's affected by the resonance, even when Su Min keeps unraveling and climaxing again and again, Xie Yingying stays grounded. Calm. Devastatingly in charge.
That was the illusion I wanted to create. Even though Xie Yingying could be the one losing control, she's the one orchestrating every moment.
It also ties back to a line the original author gave us:
[You have to know that because of her Taiyin body and the cultivation method she practices, Xie Yingying is usually very dignified and aloof.]
And in a previous chapter:
[Taiyang energy in her body had a terrifying attraction to Xie Yingying, who had a yin body. Of course, the other party was not a beast that could not control itself. It was just that after seeing her, she probably obeyed the desires of her body.]
Those lines tell us who she is. What I wanted to do here was actually show it, through her control, her restraint, her dominance. It's not just about the physical interaction. It's about emotional strength and character.
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And we have to remember, this chapter isn't just a bed scene. It's intimate dual cultivation, deeply tied to the Yin-Yang resonance between them. I layered those concepts throughout, with passages like:
[Their opposing energies, once volatile, now danced in delicate harmony. Taiyin and Taiyang, no longer fighting for dominance, began to entwine like two rivers meeting in the valley of fate, gentle at first, then surging, unstoppable.]
[Her Taiyin qi responded instinctively, flowing toward the Taiyang heat with reverent longing.]
[A quiet whimper escaped her throat as Su Min's lips trailed down the column of her neck, lingering at the hollow of her throat, her spiritual pulse point. The moment Su Min pressed a kiss there, her meridians flared open, and their resonance deepened with frightening intensity.]
[With every slow glide of Su Min's fingers, every kiss that descended lower, Xie Yingying felt the pressure building, not just within her body, but within her very soul. Her meridians began to shimmer faintly, Taiyin qi blooming like a moonflower opening to golden dawn.]
[Her Taiyin energy pulsed again, potent, cool, intoxicating. It slithered into Su Min's body like a tide, wrapping around her dantian like ivy choking sunlight. The Taiyang within her surged, but it did not resist. It folded, reverent, like dawn bowing to dusk.]
These descriptions aren't just poetic fluff. They reflect their spiritual bond, the way their energies interlace during cultivation. It's intimate, but also mystical. A resonance of body, soul, and qi.
To wrap this up, remember what Jian Xi once said:
[After all, the first time a Lunar Sovereign Body cultivator engaged in intimate dual cultivation, their essence blood would enter their partner's body.]
I echoed that subtly here too:
[The sensation of being filled, not just physically, but spiritually, overwhelmed her. Her petals bloomed, unguarded, and her energy responded like a tide pulled by the sun.]
[Another surge of Taiyin energy crept into her meridians. Cool, black, and endless. It coiled in her limbs, nestled in her bones, cradled her core with devastating tenderness.]
[Her entire body convulsed, caught in the tide. A radiant glow pulsed from her dantian, but it wasn't pure white anymore. Faint threads of black glimmered in the light.]
[She pressed her palm to Su Min's lower belly, right over the dantian where white now danced with black, and whispered something too soft to catch.]
These aren't just pretty details. They show that something fundamental has changed inside their bodies. Something was passed on. Something sacred, intimate, and irreversible.
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Another big change was how I handled time:
[They didn't count the peaks. There was no need.
They didn't speak of time, either. It passed not in hours, but in shared heartbeats...]
Originally, Su Min's Solar Sovereign state only lasted three minutes, which added tension, restraint, and frustration. Now, it lasts an entire day. I used that not just to let the scene breathe, but to show what it meant emotionally for them.
This wasn't indulgence. It was healing.
The gift of uninterrupted time, free from the world and cultivation limits, gave them a space to simply exist. It was peace. It was presence.
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Even when Su Min was completely spent, she still gave herself to Xie Yingying:
[Her breaths came slow and shallow, limp and pliant in her embrace.
But Xie Yingying didn't stop.
Even when the Taiyang glow dimmed, she never pulled away.]
That says everything about their relationship. Su Min trusts Xie Yingying not just with her body, but with her spirit. Xie Yingying, once afraid of taking too much, now knows how to give without hurting.
Even when Su Min is exhausted, she allows herself to keep receiving. This was important. Their dynamic has always revolved around protection, and here, Su Min chooses to be vulnerable:
[Even when Su Min's gaze grew hazy, she never pulled away.
And still, she gave.
She let Xie Yingying guide her down again, open, willing, and completely hers.]
This line is one of the most important in the section. It captures their dynamic now. Su Min trusts Xie Yingying enough to let go. She isn't afraid of being overwhelmed. She doesn't feel the need to be the strongest in the room. She can collapse and know the hands catching her won't vanish.
This was never just about cultivation. It was about surrender, safety, and acceptance.
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The lower part of "chapter: Time to Depart" originally ended with a brief, almost clinical sealing of Taiyang energy and a note that Su Min would be leaving soon. Xie Yingying's feelings stayed buried under habit and decorum, and Su Min's departure didn't have any real emotional closure.
In my translated and restructured version, I wanted to dig deeper. Their last night together wasn't just physical release. It was culmination, confession, and a quiet promise made in silence.
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The aftercare portion was the first place I expanded.
Instead of ending the scene with a simple cooldown, I slowed the moment into something rare for both of them: stillness. The lovers who had once chased cultivation and vengeance now lay beside each other, vulnerable in a way that had nothing to do with their bodies.
["I didn't mean to lose control," Xie Yingying said quietly…]
Originally, there was no room for Xie Yingying's doubt. Here, she reflects openly and vulnerably for the first time in this arc. It's not about cultivation or restraint anymore. It's about her heart.
She admits she thought she had trained herself to endure Su Min's presence without faltering, but the moment they touched, she knew she was wrong. That line isn't just romantic. It's an emotional confession wrapped in simple words.
["You're mine."
"Yes," she whispered. "I've always been."]
This mutual acknowledgment had been building over several arcs. The resonance between them was once described as fate or cultivation compatibility. But here, it became something human. Something chosen.
And still, it's never loud. The tone stays soft, restrained, and reflective of who they are. This scene marks the first time both of them admit, without jokes or sidestepping, that what they share isn't just circumstance. It's love.
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Then comes the farewell section, split into two parts, the late night and the morning after.
In the original, Su Min left after Xie Yingying refused her offer to help with cultivation. The conversation ended lightly and Su Min went off to build the Secret Realm.
But that version really took the weight out of their goodbye.
In my version, I rewrote the morning as a quiet, almost sacred moment. Both women carry the emotional marks of the night before, visible in the soft ache of their limbs and the bruises left by heat and hunger, but even more in the way they speak to each other.
["You'll come back."
"I always do, don't I?"
"That's not what I meant."]
Here, I expanded what was once a single line into a real emotional exchange. Xie Yingying, who used to hide behind formality, finally speaks her truth.
["Let me say it... Just once. Come back. No matter how long it takes. Come back to me."]
That line was crucial. It isn't about physical longing. It's about hope and faith. Her request isn't dramatic or desperate, but firm. It mirrors Su Min's earlier promises, but reversed. For once, Xie Yingying is the one asking Su Min to return, not for the world or the realm, but for her.
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Throughout the morning-after scene, I added symbolic details to show how their relationship has changed. For example:
[Her robe half-slid over one shoulder, clung more like mist than fabric.]
The image isn't cold or distant anymore. Xie Yingying wears the aftermath of the night like a second skin. She isn't hiding. She doesn't rush to restore her composure. She allows herself to be seen, and for someone like her, that is an act of love in itself.
Even Su Min's departure is no longer abrupt or casual. It carries reverence.
[Her departure was quiet, but her presence lingered, like the last warmth of sunlight before winter claims the sky.]
This line reframes Su Min's usual comings and goings. She isn't just a wandering alchemist with a hidden past. She is leaving a piece of her soul behind. And both of them know it.
Finally, the chapter closes where the original did, with the creation of the Secret Realm, but now it is filled with longing.
[Still, somewhere in her thoughts, between the flickers of flame and frost, was a girl with moonlight in her eyes and fire in her veins.
"...Don't wait too long," Su Min murmured, half to the wind, half to herself. And then the forest bloomed.]
That last line is symbolic. Their goodbye isn't an ending. It is the start of new growth.
In the original, this chapter was just a transition.
In my expanded version, it became a rite of passage. Not for their power, but for their hearts.
So the chapter ends not with a pause, but with a bloom.
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If you're curious about the full goodbye in the original version, I've written it in the next chapter.
I spent more than two weeks on this chapter. It's only the second explicit scene I've written, but in many ways it felt even harder than the first. Not because of the content itself, but because I had so much I wanted to convey.
This chapter isn't just about sex. It's about personality, emotional buildup, trust, and letting go.
I wanted Su Min's mischievous nature to shine, how she uses teasing as both armor and affection. I wanted to show how Xie Yingying constantly restrains herself, how tightly she holds the reins of her desire, and what it means when she finally lets go. Their dynamic has always been clear in my mind: Xie Yingying is the one who gives, quietly dominates, while Su Min submits willingly, lovingly, and trustingly.
But knowing that is one thing, and showing it naturally is another. I kept asking myself, in what situation can I express this clearly without disrupting the story's rhythm? Balancing pacing, character voice, and sensual tension was incredibly tricky.
I also emphasized the theme of time throughout the chapter. Back then, Su Min's Solar Sovereign state lasted only three minutes a day. Now, after absorbing the Taiyang essence, it lasts a full day, and that matters. Not just as a power-up, but for what it means for the two of them.
A whole day means they don't have to rush. It means Xie Yingying doesn't have to hold herself back. It means Su Min can give, and keep giving, even when she's exhausted, because she wants to, because she loves her.
This chapter also deepened a quieter thread that's been there from the start. Su Min spoils Xie Yingying. She always has. Not always with gifts or praise, but with herself. With how easily she gives in to what Xie Yingying wants, whether it's spiritual support, safety, or intimacy. This pattern continues through The Eastern Azure Wood, Extra 4 (Part 2): Burning Through the Moonlight (NSFW), The Nascent Soul Pill is Complete, and Chaos Creation. But here, I wanted to make that spoiling explicit, framed through love, not power imbalance.
Then comes the aftercare section.
This part was really important to me. Throughout the novel, Xie Yingying rarely speaks openly about her feelings. And Su Min, despite everything, has never directly stated the nature of their relationship. Until now.
This is the one place in the story where I let that vulnerability surface.
For once, they stop teasing. They stop performing. They just speak. And what they say isn't grand or dramatic. It's honest, soft, and raw.
["You're mine."
"Yes. I've always been."]
Simple lines, but they say everything they've never put into words. That scene became the emotional anchor of the chapter.
Finally, there's the morning after. I didn't want it to be dramatic or tearful. They aren't that kind of couple. But it still had to carry the weight of what they shared the night before, and the uncertainty of what's coming next. Unlike the aftercare scene, which focused on Xie Yingying, this one centers on Su Min.
The tension is quieter now, but it lingers—in the ache of her body, in the way her gaze lingers on Xie Yingying's skin, in the hesitation before she walks away. The goodbye already happened in words. Now it happens in silence, in touch, and in absence.
I was honestly afraid this chapter might come off as cringe, clipped, or awkward. That fear followed me the whole time, just like when I wrote Extra 4 (Part 2). But this time felt even harder, because this wasn't just about an NSFW scene. It was about closure. About what it means to love someone fully, without pride, even when you have to let them go.
I truly hope you enjoyed it and that it landed the way I meant it to.