With Chapter 166: Return to Eastern Mulberry Land, we officially step into Volume 3.
I like to think of this chapter as the beginning of a new arc, not just in terms of story, but emotionally too.
And right away, we get this lovely moment with Xie Yingying.
In the original line, she sounded a little proud, saying that soon Nascent Soul cultivators and higher would be lining up for Su Min's pills. But in my rewrite, I pushed her possessiveness a bit more. Because let's be honest, Xie Yingying is absolutely that girl. Quietly competitive. Deeply loyal. Secretly smug when everyone else finally notices what she has known all along.
["Even Divine Transformation ancestors, lining up with treasures in hand, begging your Grand Elder for a single pill."]
That's not just her showing off her sect. That's her showing off her girl.
And she does it in a subtle way. She doesn't hold Su Min's hand or brag loudly. She just watches these shocked junior cultivators and remembers.
So now, when she looks at those junior disciples trying to wrap their heads around how strong their Grand Elder really is, she feels it.
["Wasn't Su Min's rising prestige… well. That was practically the same thing, wasn't it?"]
That line was one of my favorites to write. Because at this point, it's not about proving anything. It's natural. Su Min's prestige is part of hers. Their futures are already tied together, and they both know it.
With Chapter 203: Sect Conference, we step into Volume 4.
And we start with absence. I didn't add any new action scenes to this chapter. It's just a room, a memory, and a question. Where is Xie Yingying?
That alone sets the tone.
The original goes like:
["Ask the current sect master to come see me. I have something to ask."
After carefully feeling it, with her current soul power, naturally no one in the entire sect could detect it, but this also made her realize that Xie Yingying was not here. This was not good news for her. What on earth did that guy encounter?
Just as Su Min was thinking, a sound of breaking air came from the sky. Luo Ya also rushed over quickly.
...
"No, Master Xie left a special life jade here before he left. If she is in danger, she can activate the life jade to call for help, but now everything is very peaceful."
"I see."
Su Min's frown relaxed when she heard this. ]
For someone like Su Min, who has always moved through chaos with clarity and precision, the unknown is more dangerous than any enemy. She can block blades. She can turn poisons into medicine and scorch the heavens with a single breath. But she can't fight silence.
And that silence is what gives this chapter its weight.
[Xie Yingying's presence, always faint, cool like moonlight, but quietly reassuring, was nowhere to be found.]
That line is meant to show how someone can become part of your background. Not loud, not demanding, just quietly there. When that presence suddenly disappears, the whole world tilts a little. That's the kind of connection they share. And here, Su Min doesn't panic or lash out. She adjusts her sleeves. She steadies her breathing.
The unease speaks for itself.
I added more subtle physical cues here, like a tightening shoulder, a breath held too long, qi shifting beneath her skin. Su Min never says she's worried. She doesn't need to. We feel it in every small movement and every quiet moment, especially when Luo Ya mentions the life jade is still whole.
["She never acts carelessly. But for her to stay gone this long..."]
It's a chilling moment, because we know how much Su Min trusts Xie Yingying's judgment. So if Su Min feels something is wrong, then something truly is wrong.
This also marks a shift in the story. Su Min's strength has grown. She's no longer trapped by sect rules or petty schemes. But as her influence widens, so does the space around her.
Xie Yingying is the one person she lets herself worry about. The one person she lets herself need. So the start of Volume 4 reminds us that even with all her power, there's one thing she can't stand to lose.
["If someone dared touch her... if anyone so much as laid a hand on her..."]
This isn't just foreshadowing. It's a promise. Su Min may have risen higher, but her feelings haven't softened.
This volume won't just be about strength. It's about what happens when the person you would protect with your life isn't there at your side.
And Su Min? She'll burn the sky before she lets anyone take Xie Yingying from her.
Let's move to Chapter 204: Reunion with Yao Xian'er.
This was one of the moments I decided to shape with more emotion. In the original, the exchange between Su Min and Yao Xian'er leaned heavily on plot setup. It got the job done, it moved fast, but it didn't give much room for the emotional buildup these characters already shared.
So I made some intentional changes here, not to overwrite the author's idea, but to deepen what was already present.
For example, the original phrasing:
["About that little wife of yours."
"Um?"
....."]
It was quick and to the point, but it kept Su Min's protectiveness in the background instead of letting readers feel it. I turned it into more of a slow burn. A pause, a glance, a shift in her breathing. The moment she hears "your little wife," her expression tightens. She doesn't panic on the spot, because she never does, but that thread of tension under her composure starts to unspool. I wanted that unease to come through quietly, not through direct statements, but through pacing and atmosphere.
I also leaned more into Yao Xian'er's layers as a character. In the original, she explains the fall of a past Lunar Sovereign Body. The information is there, but her distant tone makes it feel like a history lecture. So I gave her a softer delivery, something that carries a hint of sorrow even when her words stay sharp.
["She tried. Desperately. Until her pride turned to obsession, and her obsession gave birth to inner demons."]
These lines weren't in the original, but they fill the emotional gap between her memories and the danger Su Min and Xie Yingying now face. I didn't want her to feel like another "wise senior" dumping lore. She's lived this story once. Now she's watching a reflection of her past unfold again.
I added one more detail. Yao Xian'er teasing Su Min just a little:
["Look at you. I never thought I'd see the day when the future Empress of Five Element Holy Body was tethered by moonlight."]
It isn't just playful. It's Yao Xian'er acknowledging how deeply Su Min cares, and maybe letting a bit of her own regret slip through. It's a gentle tease in the middle of a heavy moment, which fit the tone perfectly.
As for Su Min, I rewrote her response to Yao Xian'er's final explanation with a long, steady exhale.
["Troublesome," she echoed dryly. "That's putting it lightly."]
Because that is who she is. Calm on the outside, even while carrying the weight of the people she wants to protect.
And you know, remembering something from an earlier chapter actually made everything click for me. The first time Su Min and Xie Yingying saw Yao Xian'er during the Golden Core Avenue arc, Yao Xian'er was wearing pure white robes. They were compared to mourning clothes, or funeral attire.
That detail stood out back then, and now, thinking about it again, it's hard not to wonder if the author was hinting at something much deeper. ( •̀_•́ )✧
Now that we know about Yao Xian'er's past, that she once loved someone in her previous life and was forced by tragedy to kill and seal that person herself, the meaning behind that white robe starts to make sense, doesn't it?
Maybe it wasn't just for style or intimidation. Maybe it was grief. Maybe it was a symbol of a wound she never healed.
And there is something else.
In that same scene, the original text mentioned twice, and my version mentioned it four times, how Su Min protected Xie Yingying from Yao Xian'er's overwhelming pressure.
First as a reaction, then again with even stronger emphasis. That repetition felt deliberate. Almost like the story was drawing a line between Su Min and Xie Yingying's bond and something Yao Xian'er once had. (｡•́︿•̀｡)
So now that we know the truth... it all adds up, right? ( •̥́ _ •̀ू )
The foreshadowing was already there, quiet and waiting for us to piece everything together.
Chapter 205: The Sighing Holy Sons
This chapter was where I pushed deeper into Su Min's voice. In the original, her frustration was mostly internal and very brief. The setup was simple. She was given a jade slip that would later guide her to face a remnant soul with a dangerous origin, and Yao Xian'er basically passed the responsibility to her without much buildup.
I wanted to show not just Su Min's irritation, but also the understanding behind it. Her reaction isn't only annoyance. It's her quiet acceptance of what it means to pick up the burdens left behind by others, especially old ones that still linger. So I reworked and expanded the moment to bring that out.
Take this line:
["That guy is in charge of killing but not burying?"]
I rewrote it as:
["That woman just… kills someone and leaves the mess for others to clean up?"]
The difference isn't just the words. The pause, the rhythm, the way she holds the jade slip are all meant to slow her reaction. Her emotion comes through in the acting, not just the dialogue. I wanted her irritation to breathe a little instead of being rushed aside.
The original also said:
[Of course, she could only complain in her heart…]
But Su Min isn't the type to only sulk internally. So I let her mutter a small complaint out loud, something a bit playful:
["If this were her first life, I'd have beaten her up already."]
It's a tiny release of pressure. It also shows she still respects Yao Xian'er under everything. People with strong personalities cope through dry humor, not by sitting quietly and frowning.
I also chose to deepen the moment when Yao Xian'er handed her the jade slip. The original described her face as "a complex and indescribable expression," but that felt like a moment that needed more space. So I gave it more weight:
[Not cold, not resigned. Just quiet. Complicated.]
I wanted readers to slow down there, because Su Min does. Even if she doesn't want to admit it, she understands. The bond Yao Xian'er once had with the previous Lunar Sovereign is never fully spelled out in the original, but the potential meaning is strong. It mirrors what Su Min has with Xie Yingying, not in exact form, but in depth. I leaned into that parallel on purpose.
["Maybe this wasn't just delegation. Maybe it was her version of atonement."]
That was the emotional thread I added. It isn't only that Su Min is responsible now. It's that, by giving her this task, Yao Xian'er is placing her in a line of people who made mistakes, who lost someone they cared about, and who still wish someone else can finish what they couldn't.
And at the end, I changed Su Min's final thought from:
[She had to clean up the mess herself.]
to
["Guess I'm the designated cleaner now."]
It's a small shift, but the word "designated" carries a tired kind of acceptance. There's some sarcasm in it, but not bitterness. And under that complaint, I kept Su Min's resolve as clear as ever:
[If there was even a sliver of threat, Su Min would be there first…]
Because no matter how annoying the job is, Su Min has already chosen to protect Xie Yingying, even from dangers that belong to another lifetime. That deserved more room to settle into the scene.
Chapter 211: Lin Daiyu Uproots the Willow Tree
This chapter gave me a rare chance to show Su Min's vulnerability. Not physical vulnerability. She's an alchemist, a strategist, and a cultivator with a steady will. But charm magic, especially the kind that digs into unspoken desire, shakes her calm just a little. I felt that deserved more space, so I slowed the scene down and expanded it.
[The only problem was that it was her anchor point, a guarantee that she would not lose herself in this immortal road. But now it was a bit troublesome, because she had not seen anyone use charm on her, so she really couldn't say whether it was effective or not.
"Why don't I just use a one-for-one strategy and defeat her with my abundant reserves of elixirs."
At this time, Su Min had already begun to think wildly in her mind, mainly about the last time she fought with a late-stage spirit transformation expert. He didn't even start to fight, but was confused by her and lost his way, and then he directly admitted defeat and surrendered.
You have to know that Su Min herself can't do this kind of thing. Those who can reach the late stage of transformation are definitely people with strong character. The so-called women are just passing clouds. To be fascinated by such a woman, Su Min can only say that the charm of the woman should not be underestimated.
The only pity is that both illusion and charm are effective against a single person, and bystanders can't see anything at all.]
In the original, Su Min briefly considers how humiliating it would be to fall to a charm technique, but the narration moves past her worry fast. I decided to really sit in that fear instead.
Her line:
["Why don't I just use a one-for-one strategy and defeat her with my abundant reserves of elixirs."]
became:
["Maybe I should just trade blow for blow and overwhelm her with my pill reserves?"]
The meaning stays the same, but now it sounds like she's trying to calm herself. She's reaching for a logical plan because deep down, she's shaken.
I wanted to show how unusual that is for her. Su Min almost never loses her footing. And the idea that someone could reach into her soul and tug at the emotions she tries to keep hidden scares her more than any sword technique.
Her fear starts spiraling.
[What if, heaven forbid, she liked it? What if she thought it was Xie Yingying?]
That wasn't in the original, but it fit the moment. Charm techniques don't just mess with the surface. They grab at whatever you keep locked away. I wanted that danger to feel real.
The original barely skimmed over it. I brought it forward.
For the actual clash, I leaned into a mix of timing and character consistency. The Buddha-light moment existed in the original, but it passed too fast. So I gave it a beat, something the reader could hear in their head.
[Golden Buddha light erupted around her body in radiant waves.
"Xuan Mengyin's lips moved soundlessly: 'You've got to be kidding me.'"]
This sudden switch is the natural result of Su Min's earlier panic. She was terrified she'd lose herself to charm magic, only to instinctively activate a cultivation method that cuts off worldly desire entirely. The irony felt perfect, so I let it land.
The tone was important, though. I didn't want it to turn into pure comedy. It still had to match both characters: Su Min's cautious dignity, Xuan Mengyin's pride, and the crowd's amusement.
[Su Min, radiating divine light and chanting silently like a monk cornered at a brothel…]
That was my way of showing the absurdity from the outside while keeping Su Min's inner steadiness intact.
For Xuan Mengyin, I added a touch of dry self-awareness:
[She could already hear the nicknames forming. 'The temptress who couldn't tempt.' No thank you.]
This wasn't in the original, but it helped round her out. She's not a flat temptress archetype. She's smart enough to know when to retreat before things get embarrassing.
Chapter 212: What Are You Fighting With? Motherly Love?
This chapter was originally short and to the point. It wrapped up the aftermath of the fight and moved straight toward the next arc. In the original, Su Min gives a quick statement, assigns responsibility, and then heads off to refine more pills.
But I felt there was more underneath that surface.
I saw the kind of worry that does not show itself loudly. The type that sits in your chest and keeps tugging every time you stop to breathe. That quiet panic when someone important has not returned yet, and you cannot tell if it is because they are capable, or because something went wrong.
So I slowed everything down. I let Su Min feel what the original only hinted at.
[Because the most urgent matter had already taken root in her heart: the Snow Plains.]
This line was not in the original, but it signaled the shift in her focus. Her duties still matter, and she knows her place in the bigger picture. But something deeper is already drawing her attention away. The jade pendant that used to be a lifeline is now just lying there. Not broken. Not glowing. Only silent. And in a story where even spiritual items have voices, that silence means more than any warning.
[She was many things: alchemist, strategist, cultivator.
But patient?
Not when it came to Xie Yingying.]
Here is where I let her worry show. It is not weakness. It is connection. The original did not stay on her emotional side for long, but with how much she has shown she cares about Yingying, this moment needed more warmth.
I also chose to phrase her departure in a specific way:
[There was no time to bask in her so-called victory, or reflect on the strange, awkward tension of winning a fight where her opponent hadn't dared to use her best move.]
This keeps the odd feeling of the previous battle in full view. Su Min won, but it did not feel satisfying. That uneasy aftertaste pushes her to leave even faster, not because she wants to celebrate or brood, but because her mind is already with someone else.
For the ending, the original line was:
[Being able to protect one side is already the limit.]
I adjusted that line to show both realism and responsibility:
[As for saving the entire world? She was not that capable yet, nor that selfless. Protecting one region, and one irreplaceable person, was the limit of her responsibility and her heart.]
This version keeps her grounded. She is not meant to be perfect. She is someone trying to stay true to what she can do, holding on to a balance of duty and devotion in a world that always demands more.
Chapter 213: What Does It Feel Like When Your Home Becomes a Tourist Attraction?
This chapter was originally meant to be a light transition. Su Min revisits places tied to her past, like Wei Wu Province, the Southern Borderlands, and the early years when she struggled to survive. But the original version only gave us the briefest look at her feelings. It mentioned she had been chased, that she broke someone's legs, and that she outlived everyone she once knew.
["Southern Borderlands?"
Hearing this, Su Min couldn't help but sigh. If her previous life was her anchor, she would never forget it for a moment, but Southern Xinjiang was really a place that was so far away that it was strange and yet familiar to her.
When I rushed over there, I encountered some chieftains who wanted to do something to me. Unfortunately, I broke their legs on the spot, and now those people are dead.]
It was straightforward and clean, but it had no ache behind it.
So I rewrote the chapter with that ache as the focus.
["The Southern Borderlands, huh..."
Her past whispered through that name like an old song she hadn't heard in centuries. It was where she'd once fled with nothing. Where she'd fought tooth and nail just to survive. Where her name had meant nothing, and then suddenly everything.
She could still remember the scent of wet bamboo and stone. The cries of hawkers in the market streets. The dusty road where she had once broken a chieftain's legs for wanting her to be his concubine.
Everyone from that time was gone. Even those who'd touched cultivation hadn't lived long. Golden Core cultivators were rare, and few reached Nascent Soul.
Her heart should've been untouched by this.
Should've been.
But a flicker of memory curled beneath her ribs like a slow burning coal.]
Su Min is sharp, calculated, and often reserved. But she is also someone who remembers, quietly and deeply. When she hears the name "Southern Borderlands," I wanted it to sting. Not dramatically, but like an old bruise she thought had faded.
[Soon after a few days, Su Min returned to the familiar yet unfamiliar place.
Weiwuzhou was where she spent her first few decades. Unfortunately, the people he knew at that time, even those who had entered the cultivation world, were now dead. Because among them, not to mention entering the Nascent Soul stage, there was not even a single Golden Core stage.
What's more, the lifespan of a cultivator in the Golden Core stage is not enough. The only thing that made her feel relieved was that one of the flowers and plants she had been raising in her spare time actually survived.
...
The current 100,000 mile mountain range in southern Xinjiang was too different from what she remembered. Now that the heaven and earth were connected, this was the frontier bordering Yaoxinzhou. The so called terrain was not unbreakable in the face of human power.
Therefore, the remote and uninhabited mountains in Su Min's memory were now forcibly penetrated from the middle. A passage leading directly to the Yaoxinzhou was forcibly opened up.]
And when she returns to Wei Wu Province, that feeling only grows stronger. The landscape has changed. The people are gone. Even those who once cultivated are nothing but dust now.
[A few days later...
Wei Wu Province.
The land of her beginning.
When Su Min stood at the edge of the Southern Borderlands, wind catching the edge of her sleeves, a strange ache stirred in her chest.
The mountains had changed. The borders carved open by violence. A direct path to Yao Xin Province now cut clean through what were once natural fortresses. Time had reshaped the terrain, but not her memories.
Here was where she had lived nameless and rootless.
Here was where she had become something.
Everyone from then was gone.
She had outlived them all.
That was the irony of her body, her cultivation, not a curse, but a choice.]
This was the moment I chose to bring back something the story had not highlighted for a while: her Immortality talent.
[It had been a min maxer's dream. Late bloomer, but eventually unstoppable.]
This detail was not directly in the original chapter, but it appeared in the novel's lore earlier. I felt it deserved some space here. Not just for background, but to show how Su Min sees herself. She was someone who once treated life like a strategy game, only to wake up trapped inside the world she optimized for.
[She clicked 'Confirm' and never logged out again.]
I wanted that line to feel heavy, like a memory from a life she barely recognizes now. Because at this point, that so called perfect build is not a boon. It is a weight.
In a game, immortality is fun. In a world with no save point, no reset button, and no way out, it becomes something else.
Loneliness.
That is what I wanted to bring out in this chapter.
[Yes, she was eternal. But eternity, in the end, was a kind of silence.]
Not a dramatic silence. Just the slow fading of human warmth. Su Min does not cry over her losses. She simply avoids forming new attachments, because she knows how it ends. They leave. They die. They betray.
So when she sees that one plant still alive after all these years, lingering in the soil she once tended, it hits deeper than any reunion with a person could.
[One of her plants had survived. Only one. But one was enough.]
This is where her feelings breathe, even if they do not speak. This is where the idea of home shifts from a place, to a memory, to a fragile living reminder.
In the end, I expanded this chapter not to soften Su Min, but to show how deeply she feels even when she seems untouched.
Because the strongest walls are often built by the hands that have been hurt the most.
Chapter 216: Tianhan Snow Plains
This chapter originally had a very practical flow. Su Min meets a descendant of someone from her past, recognizes a bamboo demon that survived one of her old cultivation experiments, and then prepares to enter the dangerous snow plains.
The emotion was there, but pushed down. So I brought it to the surface.
First, in her exchange with Cao Yuzhou, I took out the empty politeness. Su Min doesn't push him away, but she doesn't welcome him either.
[Her tone was neither warm nor cold, simply neutral, like mist sliding past stone.]
In the original, she just answers with a plain "I see." I turned that into a deliberate choice to keep her distance. Not because she wants to hurt him, but because she has already buried too many people. Names are just memories now. In this world, legacy comes from power, not bloodlines. She acknowledges the connection, but it no longer matters to her. That chapter of her life is closed.
Then we reach the bamboo demon.
In the original, it is a small moment of surprise and reflection. I leaned into the quiet grief of creating something without meaning to. Su Min never expected those bamboos to grow. She planted them out of curiosity, maybe even a small moment of kindness, then she left.
Now only one is still alive.
[She had nearly forgotten them. Just a flicker of effort from her centuries ago, and yet this one had survived. Not because of her. Because he endured.]
I didn't write this to be overly dramatic. But it carries weight. Survival in Su Min's world is never loud. No one praises it. It is quiet. It is lonely. Just like her. That bamboo demon mirrors her in a way she might not want to face.
And then we move toward the Tianhan Snow Plains.
The original text explains that only Golden Core cultivators or above can withstand the spiritual ice storms, and that Su Min is safe because of her strength.
I added a line after that:
[It wasn't the cold she feared. It was the silence.]
That shifts the mood of the whole journey. Su Min isn't afraid of the ice or the danger. She is afraid of walking into a place where Xie Yingying might be gone.
[Somewhere in that frozen desolation…
Xie Yingying was waiting. Or worse, she wasn't.]
This moment shows her protective nature in a new way. It is not about power anymore. It is about fear. She can fight anything. She just doesn't know how to deal with absence.
I ended the section with a line that goes against her usual emotional distance:
[For Su Min, who had long sealed her heart to everyone but one,
That was the only kind of cold she still feared.]
Because even with all her cultivation, knowledge, and strength, the thing that still hurts her is the idea of losing the one person who managed to reach her.
Chapter 224, The Law of Time
In the original version of this chapter, the narration mostly focused on pacing and logistics. Su Min senses danger, gets ready, and moves to intervene before the evil soul wakes up. The key parts were there, like urgency, danger, and determination, but the emotional core felt a bit muted.
In my rewrite, I slowed the pacing just a little. Not to drag things out, but to make Su Min's emotions clearer.
The biggest change was in her tone:
["First, those three old monsters." Her voice was low. Calm. But a thin layer of frost glazed over her killing intent.]
In the original, her line is simple: "If they want to surround and kill Xie Yingying, don't blame me for taking action." It works, but it doesn't hit as hard. By adding that contrast between her calm voice and the fury underneath, I brought forward something that's been part of her from the start. Su Min doesn't lose her temper easily, but when she does, it's lethal.
This is also where I quietly reinforced her protectiveness toward Xie Yingying, but with more accuracy. She isn't just charging into danger. She's thinking ahead, weighing risks, and protecting someone she cares about. Her worry is both strategic and personal.
Another important change is the way time is framed as both a threat and a chance:
[The Evil Soul inside the tomb was only showing signs of awakening, it would take years to fully emerge. For cultivators, that was a blink of an eye. But to Su Min, it was a window.]
In the original, this idea is functional: "It may just be a blink of an eye for a cultivator, but if you want to do something, then it is more than enough." I shifted it into something more reflective of her character. For Su Min, time isn't something she waits through. It's something she cuts open and uses, and she plans to do exactly that.
When the narration brings up the Lunar Sovereign Blood Essence, I kept the idea that she wouldn't use it, but I made the reason fit the theme more smoothly:
[With three divine treasures already in her body, its benefits were limited. But it could serve as a beacon.]
The beacon metaphor isn't just physical. It's emotional. Su Min doesn't need more raw power. She needs direction. This drop of Yingying's essence blood acts as a tool and a tether. It shows how Yingying is still at the center of her choices, even when she's not there.
The passage ends with a shift in tone that tightens everything:
[Thus, Su Min couldn't afford any variables.
Not now.
Not with Xie Yingying inside that tomb.]
Three short lines, set apart on purpose. Each one sharpens her focus like a blade being drawn.
Chapter 225, Time Accelerates Again
This chapter is short but important. In the original, Su Min confronts the three cultivators guarding the tomb entrance, throws out a sharp line, and acts right away. The structure is solid and the action moves well, but there was room to raise the emotional tension. Not by adding more lines, but by making each one land harder.
Take the original line:
["Who do you think is in there, and who am I?"]
It's a challenge, yes, but it leans more on a rhetorical tone than real force. I shifted it into something colder and more grounded:
["Guess who's inside," she said coolly. "And guess who I am."]
There's a small but important difference between "Who do you think" and "Guess". The first sounds more openly confrontational. The second feels controlled, even a little amused, which fits Su Min better at this stage of the story. She's not yelling or losing control. Her mind is already set. The firebird is coming, whether they grasp the situation or not.
I also expanded the firebird's entrance. Not only for the visual, but for the sensory impact:
[A shrill cry echoed through the blizzard as a massive firebird, wreathed in radiant vermilion flame, tore through the snowstorm like a falling star. Heat surged in its wake, melting frost into steam.]
This keeps the emotional contrast front and center. Ice and fire, quiet and fury. Su Min doesn't explain her intent. She moves. The image isn't just for show. It's a physical metaphor. She is the firebird, cutting through every barrier, heading straight for what matters because Xie Yingying is inside and time is slipping away.
Her exit line also carries weight without spelling anything out:
[Without sparing the stunned ambushers another glance, Su Min plunged downward, straight toward the tomb buried beneath the ice.]
It looks simple, but it's all about momentum. There's no pause. No second thoughts. Only resolve.
Chapter 226, The Tomb
Let's start with the first confrontation:
["Now, it's just you left. Since you came here to hunt Yingying, you might as well stay forever."]
In the original, Su Min's line works, but it feels a little plain. I reshaped it so it sounds more deliberate and final. The phrase "stay forever" does more than threaten. It condemns. It turns the tomb from a battlefield into a grave, and places Su Min in the role of the one who seals it. That shift matters.
Then we reach the voice, the first real sign of the soul waking inside the tomb.
In the original, the line leans into pettiness:
["Nanming Lihuo, Five Elements Holy Body. Are you Yao Xianer's apprentice? She didn't even come to see me."
A somewhat resentful voice sounded beside Su Min's ears, which made her brows jump subconsciously. Should we say that this is the world of immortal cultivation where the ratio of men to women is completely unbalanced? Are these people's actions so wild?]
I chose to expand the emotional depth here. This isn't simple bitterness. It's an old wound. A long, quiet abandonment. So the voice shifts into something less hostile and more haunted.
["Nanming Lihuo… Five Elements Holy Body… Are you Yao Xian'er's disciple? She couldn't even come to see me herself?"
The voice carried more than anger, it carried grief shaped by years of silence. Bitterness, but not hatred. And it making Su Min's eyebrow twitch.]
Su Min's reaction has a slightly sardonic edge:
[Ah, the cultivation world, where gender ratios were skewed, and relationships were… complicated.]
This line nods to a truth in her world that isn't always spoken aloud. Powerful women love, resent, chase, and avoid each other for centuries. It's not just a joke. It prepares the tone for everything that follows.
Su Min's reply stays simple and steady:
["…I'm not her disciple," she replied calmly. "She simply entrusted me with the pendant."]
That distance matters. She refuses to speak on Yao Xian'er's behalf. She's not here to fill in or soften emotional history. She's only here to witness. And that gives the ancient voice room to finally reveal itself.
The original chapter ended with:
["Well, it seems that she doesn't know how to face me. Since you came with the jade pendant, you should know what happened."]
I rewrote it into:
[The silence lingered, and then came a dry scoff.
"Of course she wouldn't come herself. After everything… she still can't face me."
There it was, the undertone Su Min had suspected. Not jealousy. Not rivalry.
Regret.
"So be it," the voice said at last. "If she sent you, then you must already know… what happened."]
This is where the heart of the chapter finally comes through. Not jealousy. Not anger. Just quiet, old regret, shaped by time that never stops moving. That was the feeling I wanted to bring forward.
Chapter 227, Chaos Body
This chapter sits at a turning point between past and present, love and legacy. It introduces the fractured soul of a powerful cultivator, someone who was once a lover and is now only a remnant, and it shows Su Min's priorities without big speeches. Her choices are steady, quiet, and certain. I wanted the tension to sit in the pauses between their lines, letting their emotions unfold in silence as much as in their words.
The remnant's entrance sets the tone:
[In the icy tomb, as that voice faded, a woman dressed in ice-blue robes slowly emerged from the darkness.]
Instead of focusing only on her power, I put the spotlight on how Su Min feels it. The pressure is close to despair, not because the remnant is hostile, but because her presence is that overwhelming. It places the reader right inside Su Min's emotional reaction. And even with all that weight, Su Min's first question cuts straight to the point:
["Where is Yingying?"]
This matters. Su Min doesn't ask about danger, or who the woman is, or what she wants. Her first instinct is Xie Yingying. That is the emotional center of the entire chapter. She isn't just saving someone. Yingying has become the reason behind every decision she makes.
Now the original scene:
["oh"
But the next moment, a very ambiguous voice came from the mouth of the girl in ice blue clothes, and then she held her chin with one hand and looked at Su Min with interest. Su Min was a little embarrassed by her stare, so she stopped her actions.
"It seems that you have a close relationship with her. There is even residual Taiyin energy in your body. That is her essence and blood. Don't worry. There is no problem with her for the time being. If the evil spirit wakes up, it will be a big problem."]
I changed that section into something cleaner and more layered:
["My, you're awfully anxious. So protective... how sweet."]
The teasing is gentle, but it carries weight. I wanted the remnant to sound like someone who has lived through countless similar stories, someone who can read emotions in a single glance.
The key line follows:
["There's still residual Lunar Sovereign essence clinging to your body. Essence blood, no doubt? A rare gift. Or was it shared in a… more intimate setting?"]
This teasing isn't random. It shows how sharp she is, and it hints at a soft bitterness. It has the tone of someone who once shared something sacred, and now sees that intimacy living on in someone else.
Su Min's answer is exactly who she is at her core:
["She's important to me," she said simply.]
She doesn't deny anything, and she doesn't oversell it. She's direct and honest without trying to mask or embellish her feelings. That quiet certainty is what makes the line work.
The remnant responds with amused acceptance:
["Hm~ Clearly," the remnant mused, teasing but not cruel. "But don't worry, she's fine. For now. The evil soul sleeps... but if it stirs, well, you'll need far more than love to save her."]
Then she finally turns inward:
["That… was my greed."]
This whole admission about loneliness, choices, and regret is where the chapter's themes settle. It's not a threat. It's a confession, something shaped like a warning but rooted in her own past mistakes.
Su Min's response feels calm but pointed:
["I'm not short on options." 'Or time'.]
This is where I brought in her Immortality trait. Other cultivators race against their lifespan and cling to a single path. Su Min doesn't have that fear. She has time. That freedom lets her choose with clarity instead of desperation.
It also lets her be generous:
["She deserves to ascend. If this path leads there, let her take it. I'll find another."]
This is the heart of the chapter. Su Min quietly puts someone else's future above her own without hesitation, without turning it into a dramatic sacrifice. It's just who she is.
Chapter 228, Taiyin Qi
This chapter is quiet on the surface, but it holds several emotional turning points and hints at the deeper arc behind Su Min's changing body and identity. There's a lot of unspoken closeness here, along with themes of choice, burden, and possibility. I adjusted the phrasing and flow to bring those threads forward, especially around the core idea shown in this line:
[If Su Min were a man, she wouldn't have found it strange... But Su Min was clearly not a man...]
In cultivation stories, the exchange of essence blood is already intimate. By pushing Jiang Xi's confusion and curiosity a bit further, and by highlighting how Su Min not only received Xie Yingying's essence blood but somehow kept it, I wanted to set up what Su Min really is. She's someone built to hold things together.
This isn't just about intimate dual cultivation. It's about a body that doesn't let go, in both a literal and emotional sense.
Jiang Xi's reaction comes from wariness, not judgment. She senses something deeper. Maybe it's the Chaos Body, something even Su Min hasn't unlocked yet.
—
Possession part
Original:
["There's no hope. Just kill her."
...At this moment, Jiang Xi roared angrily...
The monster in front of her was simply the most primitive impulse...If Xie Yingying is in an important stage of enlightenment.
..and become you are not yours, and I am not mine.]
In the original, you can feel the urgency. Jiang Xi shouts, Su Min reacts, the danger is real. But the emotional weight of possession felt too thin. The line "you are not yours, and I am not mine" had impact, but it didn't have space to breathe.
So I rewrote the moment to bring out the horror behind it. Possession isn't just a life or death threat. It's a complete loss of self, two souls tearing each other apart with no witness and no rescue. I imagined Su Min not just responding quickly, but reacting with fear at the thought of watching it happen. Watching Xie Yingying be trapped inside a nightmare while she stood powerless outside.
That fear shapes her choice to destroy the Evil Soul. What could have been a tactical decision becomes something raw and desperate, rooted in her refusal to let Xie Yingying face that kind of pain.
[She could endure many things. She had endured many things. But watching Xie Yingying suffer like that, watching her cry out in silent agony while Su Min stood helplessly outside, was a possibility she would never accept.]
Instead of treating possession like a standard threat, I expanded what it really means. It's the destruction of identity. It's the collapse of both souls. The moment where "you are not you, and I am not me" becomes real.
I also added more about the mechanics behind it:
[It wasn't a battle of will, it was a war of pain. They would tear into each other, bite by bite, spirit devouring spirit, until one vanished completely.]
This turns Su Min's choice into something inevitable. She isn't angry because an evil entity tried to take over her. She's angry because Xie Yingying is vulnerable. If possession took root, it wouldn't just kill her. It would erase her piece by piece.
[Would the woman she loved still be there?]
That's the point where Su Min stops being the calm strategist. She becomes someone terrified of losing the person she loves in the worst way possible. Her anger comes from emotion, not pride.
The horror isn't in the fight. It's in the idea that Su Min might look into Xie Yingying's eyes and see someone else.
This is where Su Min's protectiveness reaches its limit. She's been calm through betrayal, quiet through war, even patient with revenge. But this cuts right into her deepest fear. So her fury doesn't need to be loud. It just needs to be absolute.
—
Yao Xian'er and Jiang Xi's scene
Emotionally, this is the heart of the chapter. It's not about cultivation levels. It's about a love that lasted through death, reincarnation, regret, and distance.
Original:
["It seems that you survived and did not die together with that thing."
The next moment, a voice with a hint of teasing was heard from it. It was obvious that this jade slip had other functions.
"Yes, this little girl has a secret."
....
..."Help me take a look at her physique…"
...
"Well, if that's the case, you should also enter the jade slip. I have already prepared your body for you. Although it will not be a Taiyin body and may even require a complete reconstruction, it is also a good thing for you."
"Um."
With the last sound, the blue figure also entered the jade slip, and then the jade slip disappeared in this space. It was transported away by a special formation]
I changed this part more than usual. Not because the original was bad, but because I wanted their relationship to shine through. The story has already hinted at their painful past. Yao Xian'er was forced to kill her. Then seal her. Their reunion, even in a small moment like this, deserved softness.
I wrote their exchange with more tenderness, with teasing that comes from shared history, with relief that neither of them says aloud. A feeling like I never stopped watching over you.
The teasing line:
["So you left more than just fragment of your power in that slip."]
And the warm, amused reply:
["You think I wouldn't keep an eye on you?"]
Their exchange is gentle and quietly tragic. They remember everything. They know nothing will be simple. But there's peace in this moment.
I added:
["Then… it's settled."
There was a moment of silence. The cold stillness that followed felt both peaceful and heavy, like snowfall over a forgotten grave.]
Then:
["...Come with me," Yao Xian'er said gently. "I've already prepared a new vessel. It's not your old Lunar Sovereign Body of course, and you'll have to start from scratch... but it's still a new beginning."
Jiang Xi closed her eyes, her smile soft and unbearably tired. "Mm."
With that single sound, her remnant soul turned into light and vanished into the jade slip. A faint glow pulsed once… then the slip disappeared entirely, drawn away by the teleportation formation Yao Xian'er had set.]
That final line:
[And just like that, the lonely sovereign of the moon found her way home.]
wasn't in the original. But I added it for closure. Jiang Xi's story ended long ago. This is her release. After lifetimes of waiting and pain, she finally gets to rest. With the person she once loved.
I couldn't leave that unspoken.
—
Su Min's Reflection
This part in the original is very understated. I rewrote it to give it the emotional lens it needed. Su Min didn't understand her Lunar Sovereign energy during intimate dual cultivation, not because she lacked insight, but because she was focused entirely on Xie Yingying:
[There was no room for distraction, no space to question her own strange transformation or chase any fleeting insight into cultivation theory.]
Every moment was attunement, to Xie Yingying's breath, body, pleasure, and safety. Their spiritual and emotional closeness is the reason Su Min wasn't analyzing her own changes.
This reframes their intimate dual cultivation as something deeply human. Su Min wasn't just practicing a technique or accidentally awakening a power. She was loving someone fully.
Chapter 229: Yingying Emerges from Seclusion
Original excerpt:
["Looks like you're here to help me."
Thinking of this, Xie Yingying was also quite moved. The road of cultivation is to seize the fortune of heaven and earth. It is very difficult to have someone willing to go all the way.
Thinking of this, she was not in a hurry, but took the initiative to help Su Min protect the law. At the same time, she also realized that the aura of the few people who had chased her had completely disappeared. It was obvious that all this was Su Min's work.
Although she is only in the middle stage of the Spiritual Transformation, it is not impossible given her skill.]
The original version kept Xie Yingying's reaction short. She realized Su Min had helped her, felt touched, and offered support. The feelings were there, but they passed by so quietly that the scene didn't fully show how meaningful this moment actually is. The line "It is very difficult to have someone willing to go all the way" carries a lot of weight in this world, but it felt almost too plain to match the emotion behind it.
So I rewrote that part to make it feel more personal and reflective. I wanted to show what "going all the way" really means in a world like this. I focused on the intimacy in small details, like a hand brushing against hair or the choice to sit beside someone not because of obligation, but because you want to. Those soft touches make their bond feel real.
The line "she was not in a hurry, but took the initiative to help Su Min protect the law" became something more grounded: she sits down with steady eyes and a calm presence, turning herself into Su Min's quiet guard. It's more than a technique. It shows emotion, loyalty, and a decision to stand with her.
Characters like Xie Yingying often reveal more through what they do than what they say. Showing her actions, instead of only her thoughts, made the moment feel alive to me. (´︶`)
I added her soft murmur, "She's reckless… but that's just like her," because it gives us a peek into a side of her she rarely shows. It's gentle, almost fond.
Sometimes love doesn't shout. It lingers in the quiet. It shows itself through steady hands, small smiles, and the choice to sit beside someone when you don't have to. I wanted to leave space for that, even if she never says the word out loud. (〃´∀｀〃)
I also made sure Xie Yingying felt significant in the scene. She isn't just reacting to Su Min. She's making a clear choice, and that choice matters in a world where loyalty is rare and trust comes at a cost.
At the end of the chapter, I added a short reflection about the "four pillars" of cultivation, especially the fourth one: the Taoist partner.
This part wasn't in the original, but I felt that after a moment like this, readers deserved a breath, a pause to understand why it mattered.
Chapter 230: Come Hug Hug
This chapter felt like a small patch of sunlight between two storms, a moment filled with teasing, relief, and soft affection before danger crept back in. The original scene already worked, but I wanted to bring out more of the quiet emotion between Su Min and Xie Yingying.
Original:
["Are you awake?" Seeing Su Min open her eyes and being frightened by her, Xie Yingying showed a hint of joy
.…"You're going to scare me to death first."
Looking at Xie Yingying, Su Min couldn't help but complain, because her soul was breaking through. So she almost blocked her perception of the outside world, which was because this was the Tomb of Taiyin.
Just looking at the three Half-Step Enlightenment Stage warriors outside who couldn't get in at all, you can see how safe it is. That's why I feel so relieved and try to get out as quickly as possible.]
The line was cute, but it left a lot of charm on the table. So I reshaped it with a more playful tone and some clearer context:
["You scared me half to death!"
Su Min instinctively scooted back, half-exasperated. During her soul breakthrough, she had blocked out nearly all external senses. But this was the Lunar Tomb, even those three half-step Dao Comprehension cultivators couldn't force their way in. She'd let her guard down.
Who would've thought the real danger was her own wife, waiting to startle her?]
That small internal joke helps show that their bond isn't built only on danger and cultivation. It's also shaped by these little moments. (๑˃ᴗ˂)ﻭ
I wanted their connection to feel like it could breathe. Su Min relaxing for once. Xie Yingying being affectionate in her typical, quietly smug way. These scenes matter because they're not dramatic. They're soft, simple, and honest in a way the story has earned.
Then the scene shifted to Jiang Xi and Yao Xian'er.
In the original, this part was straightforward. Su Min told Xie Yingying what happened, and the plot moved on.
Original:
["Yao Xian'er took her away."
…"They are a bit similar to us, but I don't know the specific situation."]
But to me, this moment was more than a status update. It was a mirror. Su Min and Xie Yingying can see a bit of themselves in those two, even if they won't say it out loud. One sealed the other away. One waited to bring her back. Their outcome was tragic, but maybe Su Min and Xie Yingying's doesn't have to be.
That's why I added:
["Their relationship," Su Min said. "It's… somewhat like ours."]
It's not dramatic, just honest. And it says plenty on its own.
I also wanted to highlight Xie Yingying's pride a bit more.
Original:
["That's right, hey, you can't beat me now."
…Xie Yingying became as proud as a peacock...]
I kept the playful tone, but I added some nuance. For her, it isn't only about surpassing Su Min. It's about finally stepping out of that quiet shadow she never admitted bothered her. I added:
[Though Xie Yingying had never said it out loud, Su Min knew. Being overshadowed had always stung, just a little…]
Because that's real. Even in close relationships, there can be pride, envy, and a need to be seen for your own strength. In this moment, Xie Yingying finally lets that side show. (๑•̀ㅂ•́)و✧
And Su Min doesn't push back. She lets her have this win. She smiles. The warmth settles between them.
Then the danger returns.
I made Su Min's sudden change in tone sharper, letting that brief warmth fade like sunlight slipping behind clouds. It's a reminder that in their world, peace never lasts for long.
So the chapter closes on warmth, on tension, and on two hearts that keep drawing closer, one quiet moment at a time.
Chapter 233: A Princess Carry
This scene is short, but it gave me one of my favorite chances to push the dynamics between Su Min and Xie Yingying just a bit further. The original was already charming—Su Min gets rescued in a "princess carry," reacts with deadpan awkwardness, and Xie Yingying gets a little mischievous joy. It worked, but I wanted to layer in more subtle emotion.
Original:
[In addition, the backlash of the elixir was about to come, and her body was shaky, but she soon realized that she was caught by someone.
"."
The space was a little quiet for a while, because Su Min was speechless to find that her posture was the legendary princess hug, and she was held in Xie Yingying's arms.
"Can you change your posture? And get out of here quickly."
Looking at Xie Yingying expressionlessly, Su Min was a little shy about her posture.
"Wow."
But after seeing her expression, Xie Yingying showed a look of surprise.
Because in her memory, Su Min had an extremely calm look, and could even respond to dirty jokes when chatting with others, but this was the first time she saw such an expression.
"I won't. Hehe, now you don't have the strength to resist me."
After a wicked laugh, Xie Yingying also flew out with Su Min in her arms. As for the latter, she had completely given up struggling, and she was indeed seriously injured now.]
I wanted to give this scene a bit more texture, not just the humor but the subtle shift in roles it shows. Instead of jumping straight to the comedy, I added a small beat of real fatigue as Su Min collapses from the pill backlash and a gentle note that she doesn't hit the ground:
[But victory always came at a price.
Her body trembled as the aftereffects of forcefully drawing on too many pills surged through her veins. Her knees buckled,]
This pause creates a bridge between battle tension and the playful moment that follows. It gives Su Min's vulnerability a little room before Xie Yingying swoops in.
[And she didn't hit the ground.
Strong arms caught her mid-fall, lifting her easily into a firm embrace.
"..."
A beat of silence passed.
Su Min slowly registered her new position, and her eyes twitched. She was in a perfect princess carry, nestled against Xie Yingying's chest. Her expression stayed perfectly blank, but a slow pink began to creep up her cheeks.
"...Can we not do this? At least change the position? Also, we really should leave."]
Su Min pretends she's unbothered even when she's obviously flustered, which is way more charming than a big dramatic reaction. (*ﾉωﾉ)
Xie Yingying, on the other hand, lets her personality slip a bit here. In earlier chapters, I kept her calm and restrained, but moments like this show her possessive side. She likes having Su Min in her arms, and she isn't shy about it:
["Oooh~?"
Xie Yingying's eyes gleamed with mischief, clearly savoring the moment. "Since when does the mighty Su Min get embarrassed? Should I call this the hidden treasure of the Lunar Tomb?"
She hugged her tighter, the delight on her face practically glowing.
"Nope~ This is a rare treasure I picked up in the tomb. A wounded Su Min, fragile, silent, and unusually obedient. I'm keeping her."
Su Min gave her a look. It would've been sharper if her face weren't so red. Still, knowing she was in no shape to argue, and honestly, too tired to care, she sighed in resignation. "I'm going to remember this."]
This isn't just playful flirting. It quietly shows who takes the lead in their relationship. Xie Yingying is the quiet storm—cool and reserved on the surface, but emotional and territorial beneath. She wants to claim Su Min, hold her, keep her. Moments like this are her way of asserting that, softly but clearly.
Su Min, despite being the stronger cultivator for most of the story, isn't initiating here. She receives affection, gets flustered, sighs, but doesn't resist. She allows herself to be carried, quietly filing away the memory like a debt to repay.
I closed the scene with:
["Good," Xie Yingying grinned, leaping into the sky with her prize in tow. "Make sure you remember who carried you across the moonlight."]
At the end of the day, that's the heart of this chapter: a playful, intimate moment showing, without spelling it out, that Xie Yingying leads, and Su Min lets her.
Chapter 249: Are You Even Capable?
This part originally had just a light, almost throwaway comment:
[This is also why Xie Yingying likes to stick with her. Of course, it's not because she is greedy for her body, but it is really convenient to follow Su Min.]
The line made me pause. It's clearly meant as a small joke, a playful deflection about how close they always are. But I felt it was the perfect spot to dig a little deeper. I wanted to keep the casual, joking tone but also reveal what's really going on beneath the surface.
I started by giving Su Min more presence. In the original, her usefulness is noted—support, coordination, combat—but I wanted readers to feel what it's like to fight alongside her. So I wrote:
[Fighting alongside her was like operating within the eye of a storm, effortless coordination, absolute clarity.]
This shows why people trust her instinctively, why Tian Hao doesn't question her judgment, and why, subtly, Xie Yingying never strays far.
Then I shifted the focus from logistics to emotion. That throwaway line—"not because she's greedy for her body"—is funny, but it also hides a deeper truth. The joke is a deflection. I leaned into that, keeping the surface humor but letting the unspoken weight shine through:
[The truth was, Xie Yingying was… territorial. Possessive, in that quiet, elegant way of hers. And when Su Min was within reach, within sight, she was at ease.]
That's who she is. She doesn't cling. She doesn't demand. But she guards. She watches. She keeps Su Min close, not out of need, but instinct. Instinct that says: this person is mine to protect.
I finished the passage with soft irony:
[Not that she'd ever say as much aloud.
Certainly not because seeing Su Min disappear, even for a moment, made her chest tighten. Or because staying close meant no one else could draw near.
No, definitely not that.
No, she would always insist, almost too quickly, that staying close to Su Min was simply practical.
Just practical.
Of course.]
That last repetition—of course—says everything. She knows. We know. But she won't admit it. (≖ᴗ≖✿)
This was one of those moments where a single joke in the original gave me room to open up a whole layer of emotional truth underneath, without losing the playful tone.