Alrighty lets get this out of the way ExReality is the reason why I'm doing a chapter like this, I still don't think it's as important as he is making it so basically I'm writing a whole chapter from the mcs POV his initial reactions to rebirth and such since Reality said its integral if I want my readers to sympathize with him and know the character alot better.
First part is a maybe the second part is the part I gotta disagree with it's not completely necessary but it does help. Personally I thought this to be a waste of time and the reason why which I never fully explained is because the one I'm getting paid by to do this story doesn't think its necessary nor does he really want it. But since I know more people will have a similar complaint since there is usually groups of people who think similarly.
What I want to know in the comments did you think this was necessary. Was this absolutely needed was this integral to my story; because Reality thinks my reader base would think it makes my story alot better so we are testing what he said I want your opinions, honestly I'm not bashing him but I want to see who was right in their thinking and do not attack ExReality I'm giving him credit for this since he really pushed the fact people would want this so yeah careful what you wish for.
Oh yeah apparently my grammar is bad enough for people to complain about it; so there's that I mean it's true I guess I mean look at my Invincible fic. Does remind me I should update that anyways let me know what you think of the story and such I'll also set up a Q and A chapter later on today for those who dont want to join my discord server but still want to ask questions.
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[POV Ryujin]
All around me was darkness I couldn't see anything not even my own hands.
"Where am I?"
"How am I still alive?"
"didn't I die?"
I was extremely confused trying to figure out what's happening.
"Wait if I'm dead maybe I could find dad."
"Theres no need my son."
I looked behind me and saw my dad and I rushed to hug him but I phased through him.
"My son you can't touch me it's just a dream, I'm sure this isn't what you wanted to hear but you are alive as you can probably tell by the fact your conscious."
'Why couldn't it of been actually you dad, why couldn't I have led myself on.'
"You didn't lead yourself on because you came to the conclusion already."
Then light flooded the dark room and then my eyes began to flutter open and there I saw before me two people and theh were speaking.
"I'm sure he has so much potential like al the others I'm sure he will help with.... when he grows up"
'What the hell? what do you mean by all grown up?"
"I'm sure he will honey Lord... could always use the help of promising...."
My 'parents' kept whispering thinking I was asleep the man had silver hairs and and blood red eyes he was scrawny for some reason. The woman had blonde hair and silver eyes a rather large chest to go with her hour glass figure.
'Why? why do I get a second chance? wait what if dad got a second chance to. Maybe I could see him again.'
'Or what if this is all a hulciantion.'
I tried pinching myself yet I didn't have the strength to inflict pain but I felt the feeling of my hand touching my arm.
And then I realized chances are somehow I was reborn again, with a second chance at life I could do many things.
'Maybe I was reborn and given a second chance, only time will tell.'
But then I felt my consciousness fade out again, I just felt so tired.
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There you go, theres his reaction disbelief and confusion I do hope your happy, now I'm going to progress the actual story I still owe over 20 chapters so much work to do so little time. But yeah expect more updates I'll seeya later folks in the next one let me know what you think.
I'll upload a Q an A chapter soon.